Dear Sylvia,
    
   
 Have you thought about the responsibilities? Getting emancipated and 
living on your own at 16 us a big deal. Sylvia don’t get emancipated 
from your parents because your relationship with your parents will be 
ruin, having to provide for yourself, your boyfriend won’t provide for 
you, and keeping up in school will be hard.
   
 First, Sylvia don’t get emancipated because you’ll lose any good chance
 of having a good relationship with your parents. If you do this it will
 probably upset your parents and make them feel like you don’t care 
about them anymore. After getting signed away from them they most likely
 won’t want anything to do with you. Do you really want to risk loosing 
them? You will lose your relationship with your parents if you get 
emancipated. 
   
 Second, getting emancipated means you will have to provide for 
yourself. You won’t have your parents there to help you with everything,
 you’d be all on your own. Are you ready to live on your own, make your 
own money, pay the bills, and having to do everything yourself? Sylvia 
you won’t have anyone to always be there for you anymore. Having to 
provide for yourself is all apart of getting emancipated. 
   
 Third, even though you have a boyfriend, doesn’t mean he will always be
 there for you. He is in college and you’re in high school. College guys
 aren’t that trust worth!! Any guy is really not that trust worth. Also 
you’re 16 and he’s old! Don’t move out and depend on a guy until you’re 
married. At least your parents are more trust worthy. Just because you 
think you can depend on him now doesn’t mean you will always be able to.
 Don’t get emancipated because you think you have a trust worthy 
boyfriend in college.
   
 Also, getting emancipated means you will have to keep up on your school
 alone. Isn’t getting school down hard enough with your parents around 
to help you and remind you to do it? Think about how hard it’s going to 
be to do it all alone.  Getting emancipated Sylvia means you won’t have 
anyone there to help you with your school.
   
 Sylvia, you shouldn’t get emancipated from your parents because of all 
the responsibilities. First getting emancipated will probably ruin your 
relationship with your parents. Second, you will have to provide for 
yourself. Third, just because you’re in a relationship doesn’t mean he 
will always be therefor you. Also, keeping up in school, on your own, 
will be hard. Sylvia have you really thought this through?
    - A Friend  
 
Great Essay! It had great points and good facts to follow those points. I would rate it a 3 because it was overall good to the structure but there were some parts of the structure that were not there. There were good facts and information and you persuaded your audience.
ReplyDeletei agree with you Riley, its very understandable!
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ReplyDeleteI agree with Riley. Good job. :)
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