One reason Sylvia
should become emancipated from her home is because she could live
where she wants to. Currently, Sylvia lives in Texas with her family
in a small house, and she is constantly getting sunburned. She would
much rather live in Maine. Samuel Smith, a specialist on the subject
of home emancipated, says in his book that “16-year-olds that leave
their homes can then choose a different location to live at,” (39).
Moving away would not be a problem for Sylvia. Additionally, a study
done by Daniel Burg, another specialist, showed that 4 out of 4
teenagers that seek emancipation from their parent's home could leave
the area (25). There would be nothing to stop her from moving to
Maine. Sylvia should seek emancipation so that she can live where she
wants to.
Another reason why
Sylvia should try to be emancipated is so that she can spend more
time with her boyfriend and less time with her sister. Her boyfriend
is going to college outside of the state Sylvia lives in, and she
doesn't see him much. “Multiple studies have shown that girls that
seek emancipation hang out with their sisters less,” says
researcher Brian Goldfish (155). Since she wants to see her sister
less, emancipation would be ideal. “The results [of moving out] are
very beneficial, one being that more of your life can be spent with
the person you are dating,” (Smith 99). Being able to see her
boyfriend more is a major reason for Sylvia's want for emancipation,
and evidence shows that she would see him more. If Sylvia gained
emancipation, she could see her boyfriend more and her sister less,
which is a reason she should pursue it.
Third, Sylvia should
seek emancipation so that she no longer has to mow the lawn. The lawn
of her family's home is 109 acres, and it takes her 3 days to mow it.
According to Lou Larson, a young woman who gained her emancipation at
16, “another result of moving out was that the yard was not my
responsibility to trim and mow,” (22). If Lou did not have to mow
because she left home, then neither would Sylvia if she left. “Once
a girl is emancipated from her home, there is a 100% chance that she
won't have to continue mowing the lawn,” (Burg 100). There is no
doubt that Sylvia would be free of this chore. A third reason why she
should become emancipated is so that she does not have to mow her
family's lawn anymore.
Finally, Sylvia should
become emancipated from her house at 16 because she could then get a
job. Her parents will not let her get a job until she moves out. “If
a child gets emancipated from his or her home, their parents cannot
keep them from getting a job,” (Smith 5). Sylvia would be able to
seek a job because her parents would no longer be able to hold her
back. A study has shown that all teenagers who gain emancipation can
seek out a job (Burg 95). If all teenagers can seek one out, there is
no reason why Sylvia would not be able to. A final reason for her to
get emancipated is so that she can get a job.
In conclusion, Sylvia
should seek out being emancipated from her home at age 16, because
she would gain the freedom to pick where she lives, she could spend
way more time with her boyfriend and less time with her sister,
mowing the lawn would no longer be her responsibility, and she could
get a job. First, because she would no longer have to live with her
parents, Sylvia could move, and live where she wants to. Second,
because she would no longer have to spend so much time with her
sister, she could see her boyfriend more. Third, her parents would
not be able to force her to mow the lawn. Last, she could get a job
because she would not have to follow her parent's rules. The
wonderful opportunity of emancipation is waiting, and the benefits
are great.
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